2 Songs von mir…

Klingt nicht übel – find es cool, dass du auch erwähnt hast, dass die Menschen anfangen, sich die Köpfe einzuschlagen

the humans will change into bestial things

Gibt’s den schon aufgenommen?

Frozen_MoonLeider noch nicht. Aber die Riffs habe ich. Das Lied geht ungefähr 10 Minuten!

Edit: Celtic Wintermoon soll auch so um die 10 – 12 Minuten gehen.

dann bin ich ja mal gespannt. Wird’s jetzt was mit den Drums?

Bei Celtic Wintermoon ändert ihr oft die Zeiten – ist das Absicht?

Ich hab mal ein paar Verbesserungsvorschläge in rot reingemacht. Mittendrin wechselst du in die Vergangenheit und wieder zurück, sodass es wenig Sinn macht. So müsste es inhaltlich passen:

Frozen_Moon„Celtic Wintermoon“

(Copyright by: Count Shadow and Agilma)
In this day and age the vikings are living usual
(They are) drinking, playing and laughing
(They) heard stories about knights of the cross
With white armour and long swords

Torkil in his cottage in the afternoon
(is) praying to the almighy alfather Oden
May their axes be blessed by Oden’s wrath
The knights of the cross are on their way

(The) Vikings of the village knew this day would come
The rumors are true and the army of the cross
is moving over the area of Oden’s land
Snowy mountians are strange to the knights

Another village on their way
They are holding the flag with a cross on it
Killing every resident, one by one
brutal massacre in the name of god

Silent atmosphere in the village
Torkil stays at the wooden walls with his bow
(The) Women are staying in their cottages
praying to the alfather to win this battle

Thousands of white knights are at the gate
Carrying torches in their hands
And so Erik is calling his friends to battle
The christs are drawing their swords

Many arrows are flying to the side of the christs
Some white knights were hit and hurt
But the christs are too strong…
and are burning the wall down

Without mercy they are running into the village
and murder the women and the children
Erik is coming from his throne
and sees the many christs in the town

He draws his sword and runs after the mass
With the call to the battle he kills some christs
Until the night they are fighting
Then Torkil is stabbed by a general of the cross

Erik falls to the ground and cries
A strong friend which was ever at his side
Full with hate he takes revenge
(and) so many white christs get killed

The Knights of the Cross are burning down their village
Many fires in the sky
The wind of Oden’s soul blows upon the land
and the children of Oden hear a voice far away in the mountains…
„…Don’t fear the new age, a new time is born…“

The christs build many houses for their god
They have conquered a new land
But a few pagan warriors with a sword of steel,
a axe of fury, their pagan belief and Oden’s wisdom
live under the christs…

Wait, you christs… until we return
The almighty Celtic Wintermoon is watching you
and one day…
It will take revenge.
Hail the Celtic Wintermoon!

Kein Thema – hier also auch noch meine Vorschläge. Allgemein solltest du beachten, dass außer Namen und Satzanfängen alle Wörter im Englischen klein geschrieben werden. Das hab ich jetzt aber gelassen, ist nicht so wild.

Frozen_MoonFimbulwinter
Copyright by: Agilma & Atarculph 16.8.2005

For Three Years the earth will be in reign by frost and icecold Dreams
Human starve in this eternal winter
the humans will change into bestial things
in a war where only the horrible darkest soul wins

Ice….Frost….Darkness….
Fimbulwinter….

The darkest souls can survive in Ice and nobody can hear their dying cries
The Gods are powerless against the season of frost and coldness
This eternal winter of sorrow will never end

A cold breeze from the right,
A grim storm from the left,
Nowhere is fire

Ice….Frost….Darkness….
Fimbulwinter….

At the Mountains of Madness (haste von Immortal geklaut *gg*)
the elder call the Gods
But the Blizzard of Grimness was upon this high mountains
and no one heard the elders call

The gods are dead
Demons arise from Helheim
They destroy the gates of Asgaard
and conquer the hall of Oden

Everyone ist dead – Chaos arise
The earth is iced by Fimbulwinter

Ice….Frost….Darkness….
Fimbulwinter….

Where was the mighty power of Thor?
Where was the glory wisdom of Oden?
Where was the healing hand of Frigg?

They couldn’t fight on the Mountains of Madness
against the army of Lokis damned warriors

Death, sorrow, ice, frost and cold winds of doom
Stormy winds at the Mountains of Madness
Cold Gates of Asgaard
Shadows upon Yggdrasil
and Lokis damned mind on the throne of Oden

Ice….Frost….Darkness….
Fimbulwinter….

thedarknessinside
Fimbulwinter klingt teilweise schon arg nach immortal, von der Wortwahl.

…und celtic wintermoon könnte von amon amarth stammen 😉